That story was HORRIBLE! D:
This story was ever like... two months? I decided to keep it up, until i have a decision to publish the story on DeviantART.
It have lack of actions, lack of vocabularies, and repetitive... Things. :3
Also includes Lionpinkie! I was planning her, before i make her an actual OC.
Here's a quick peek out of John's story:Chapter one:
"Oof! Hey, don't touch there!" Lionpinkie shouts.
"Woah! Sorry, i didn't see you there." The stranger gets off of her.
Both staring each other, first scanning their bodies.
Both sit down on the picnic cover.
He sighs. "Alright, you know my name. My name is John." He said.
"John? Wow, for a seccond though i though you was a g- uuhhh, a guy! Sorry." Both giggles (All of my Oc's are girls. They haven't i mean EVER seen a guy before.)Chapter two:
The lable on the top says: Forest hungry restaurant. John repeat what the lable says.
"Hmm, sounds interesting." He said. John enters the restaurant.
"Holy shit!" John was suprise how amazing this place is.
"Ah! A new customer!" That girl from the previous story came in front of john. "My, what is your name?"
"My name is john. John harbuncle" He introduce himself to her.
The girl remember him from somewhere. "Wait a minute. Do i know you from somewhere?" She said.
""Well, the light pink hair, and that pink skin. Doesn't ring a bell." John shrugs.Chapter three:
"So, Lionpinkie decided to be friends with him... But, not for long..." The girl gives out an evil giggle.
Two person with a dark figure came to the girl.
One figure that is taller then the other figure.
"What do you want us to do, master?" The tall figure said.
Bonnie jumps, attempted to tackle him.
However, john's reflexes punches her in the face with his uppercut.
"Woah! Sorry, i didn't mean to hurt you!" John said.
"You big meanie! You'll pay for that!" Bonnie face turns red.
Bonnie goes with an air kick, but John grab her leg with an amazing reflexes. Chapter four:
"No, bonnie! I don't want to hurt you!" John give Bonnie a warning.
Woah! Bonnie now has a sword!? That sword is the leaf sword. It shaped like a sword and a leaf fused together, and its super sharp!
(Unlike adventure time. >.>)
"Yeah, its a cool nickname for guys. Well, i'm the only guy in this planet." John said.
"What!? You're endangered, and i'll protect you from anyone who crossed my path!" Bonnie hugs him. (That's the problem!)
"Uhh yeah." John said.Chapter five:
Bonnie has turned herself into a sword, and let john hold her.
"Bonnie?" John said.
"Don't worry, i'm a sword now okay?" Bonnie said.
"Ha! Stupid john!" Clone Lionpinkie said.
"You know that he have the legendary sword? That legendary sword can cut almost everything (Besides diamonds and golds), so i know what he's doing." Leader Lionpinkie said.
"Now why did YOU do this to me!? We was best friends for like a week, until you decided to join her side! And now i have to put an end to it!!" John quickly let go of her left arm, and uppercut her chin.Chapter six is where Lionpinkie was killed, and revived out of nowhere. She loses her memories, all of it. John have to reply all over with it.Chapter seven:
"Our tribe? But we don't have a tribe." Lionpinkie tilts her head in confusion.
"Yeah, but this time. I created a tribe next to a lake!" John said.
"Bonnie, do you need to use the bathroom?" John asked her.
"No, i'm fine. I'm a steel bladder." Bonnie said.
"S-semapi...?" Elisa slowly open the door. Wow shes pretty!Chapter eight; Nightmare Day 0:
"Hey lionpinkie! Calm the fuck down or else i will do this again!" Bonnie yells.
"Don't tell me what to do!" Lionpinkie violantly tackles Bonnie out of the room. John dodges it just in time.
"No... I cannot hurt lionpinkie anymore... I just... Can't...." John sighs.
John is clenching his head. "Agh, my head!" He yells.
"Oh Sempai, didn't you noticed that i love you...?" Succubus Lionpinkie said in his mind.
It stops. "That... Was strange..." john said.
"What was strange?" Bonnie was confused.
"My head started hurting me... And I've heard Lionpinkie... Man... I'm depressed...." John sighs.
"This can't be happening! I got to get out of here! Come on Bonnie!" John shouts.
Bonnie turn herself into a leaf sword hybrid. John catches Bonnie, holding her right as he exited his tower.Chapter Nine; Nightmare Day 1:
First day: Overworld
Someone has sounded the alarm! This tribe has being under attack by someone!
"Come on girls, lets go and see whats going on!" Bonnie said.
when they exited the tribe, They see Succubus Lionpinkie fighting the tribe people!
"Stay away from our tribe, or we have to kill you!" Savannah said.
"Try me!" Sucubbus Lionpinkie is prepared.
"Okay... Fire!" Savannah points at Lionpinkie. All the archor shoots fire arrows at her. She do takes damage, but shes not flinching.
"Ha! Your arrows are weak!" Succubus Lionpinkie said.---------------------------------------------------------
First day: Nightmare.
Time: Light Red (Sunset)
"Semapi... Are you becoming... One of them...?" Lionpinkie worried.
"It looked like it to me. If we can make it until the tenth day, we'll be able to make it out of her world for now on. This is my first
day. How many days you have Lionpinkie?" Jody asked.
"Seventh." (Ninth. I've made a mistake.
) Lionpinkie Replied.
"Then you'll be out in my Third day." Jody said.
That's all of the preview. How did you guys liked it?
Shut up, at least i tried! >n<
*Savannah burst through my door*
"Surprise motherfuckah!" Savannah shouts.